It's Saturday, 5:30 a.m. and I'm lying in bed. I remember before I went to bed my parents told us that the forecast was for snow all through the night and throughout today. I'm in Ludlow, Vermont at Okemo Mountain. Lying in bed I can smell Cinnamon Buns baking, my favorite, and some bacon and eggs. My friend Alec is still sleeping. Yesterday we came up to Vermont with my family, Alec, and family friends who have two kids. Tyler, their son, is 8 years old. He runs over to me and says, "Get up! There's 12 inches of snow outside!" He was very sanguine and happy. I jump out of bed and yell to Alec. I tell him the great news and we’re all elated and run up from the bedrooms to the kitchen. The moms are making breakfast and my dad and his friend are sitting at the table talking. My sister and her friend, who is 13, are waiting for breakfast. It was prodigious and large so we could be full until lunch. We all eat fast because we want to get on the chairlifts when they open. The trails have powder snow on them and we want to get first tracks. After I finish eating the great breakfast the moms made I go and get ready for a powder day. We all put our gear on, including hand warmers and toe warmers. We don't want to have to come inside the house to warm up. "Let’s go!" I tell Alec to hurry up. We grab our skis or snowboard and walk out to the trail to put them on. I struggle to get through the snow because it's so deep. Tyler can barely walk so I help him get through the fresh snow. "Thanks." "Yea, no problem." Everyone was ready to go down a trail. As we go up the high speed chairlift the snow is falling and coming down hard. We get to the apex or the top of the mountain. The first trail we all went together and there weren’t any other tracks. The conditions were amazing. As the day went on it got better and better. At 12:00 we all met at the house for lunch. The moms went down into town to get bread and cold cuts and drinks. As we waited for them and the sandwiches to be made we went in the hot tub to warm up. The snow was still coming down as we closed up the hot tub to go and get lunch. Everyone was hungry because we stayed out since we got up. After lunch and everyone was full we got our gear on and went out to the trail. We waited for the parents because they weren’t finished cleaning the kitchen and getting their gear on. As we were waiting Tyler threw a snowball at me and then I threw one at Alec. We all yelled, “Snowball fight!” Snowballs were flying everywhere. Tyler, Alec, and I all gained up on C.C. and Taylor. We noticed that the tracks from our feet from the morning and from coming in for lunch were covered from all the snow that was still falling. The parents came out and said that they didn’t mind if all of us wanted to go together and the parents would go together. We were out for a while and the mountain was about to close because it was getting close to 4:00. C.C., Taylor, Tyler, Alec, and I were all at the top of the mountain. C.C., Taylor, and Tyler wanted to go back to the house from an easier trail but Alec and I wanted to go for a harder run that was a lot longer. As they took a trail that went to the house that was easy, Alec and I went to a trail that I knew would have a lot of powder and no tracks on it from other people. The snow was coming down harder than before and Alec said, “Maybe we should take an easier trail because of the snow coming down so hard.” “No, it’s fine; this trail will be a lot of fun.” “I don’t know if this is such a good idea.” “I don’t want to; let’s go back to the house.” I was haphazard and wasn’t planning this out. “I said it’s going to be fine stop worrying.” So Alec was compliant and agreed with me. We ended up getting to the trail longer than usual. We tried to stay phlegmatic and calm. Alec and I both knew that the snow was coming down harder than it was at the top and it was anarchy and chaos. The weather was wanton and uncontrollable. The trail had no other tracks on it. The snow was up to our knees but we were going fast enough to get through it. I was in front of Alec and I stopped. He was right behind me and he stopped. I knew this was impasse and we couldn’t avoid the snow. I said, “The lifts are closed and we have to get back to the house.” “Yea I know.” The snow was so bad that we could barely see in front of us. We had to be tenacious and strong and determined. I told Alec that I was going to take off my snowboard because I didn’t want to take any chances. He concurred and did the same. We were both lethargic and tired from the long day and trying to make are way back to the house and the snow was heavy. I knew my way around the mountain pretty well, Alec didn’t because he didn’t come up as much as I did. We started walking and got to a lift on the middle of the mountain. It was closed and no one was there. He decided to strap on our boards and be kinetic so we could stay warm and be able to make are way across the mountain to get to the house. We made our way to the high speed lift and I knew our way back to the house from there. We only had to walk a little higher and then down. We struggled to get to the house because of the snow on the ground and the snow coming down. We finally got to the trail through some trees that leaded to the house. Alec and I were happy to get to the house. We knew we were hardy and brave to get through the snow storm. The parents were worried but we told them the story. “We were worried a little” Alec and I said as we sipped our hot chocolate.
Elated, phlegmatic, impasse, kinetic, anarchy, concur, lethargic, compliant, sanguine, wanton, prodigious, apex, hardy, haphazard, and tenacious.
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1. the conflict of this story is the snow was falling fast and they had trouble getting back to the house. it was external. it was resolved when they finally found their way back. i was invested in this because it seemed scary that they couldnt get back but more detail could have made it more dramatic.
ReplyDelete2. the protagonist changes over time because he realizes somethings are bad ideas, his insight is when his idea leads them to having a hard time finding their way home. the change is important to the story because if he didnt change he could have done more life - threatening things.
3. my favorite part of the story is when the wake up and find 12" of snow on the ground because that would be cool. this is the exposition. "He runs over to me and says, "Get up! There's 12 inches of snow outside!" He was very sanguine and happy." it stood out to me because i think it is kind of funny he said that and cool that there was that much snow outside.
4. the story's best quality is the flow of it, this makes me want to keep reading it and it is easy to read.
5. the story's theme is if youre not sure about something dont do it because it could be dangerous this is shown in the climax to the resolution.
6. what Jake needs to fix before he shows it to Mr. BG is the repition of words.
The conflict was that jake and alec could not find there way home due to the blizzard. The conflict was external and was resolved by jakes knowledge of the mountain. It could have used more detail about when they were trying to find there way home. The main character changed of the course of time because at first he was careless and wanted to go doewn the trail when alec advised him not to but towards the end he shows more compassion towards alec. The story would be different because then jake would still be stubborn and not listen to alec. My favorite part of the story was when the moms were making breakfast."The moms are making breakfast and my dad and his friend are sitting at the table talking." It stood out to me because it shows how the author would switch from first to thrid person. The theme of the story is to never give up and always to keep fighting. The author needs to work on the plot specifically on the resolution.
ReplyDeleteElated, phlegmatic, impasse, kinetic, anarchy, concur, lethargic, compliant, sanguine, wanton, prodigious, apex, hardy, haphazard, and tenacious.
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